9.2: Samples of Good Paragraph Writing

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Barbara Hall & Elizabeth Wallace
Georgia State University - Perimeter College via GALILEO Open Learning Materials

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You may find some minor errors in these sample paragraphs, but they were exactly as the student wrote them.

Sample Introductory Paragraph

A happy family is a beautiful dream with everybody in the world. What is a happy family? In my opinion, my family is a happy family because we usually spend a lot of time for together activities on special day such as my mother birthday or Lunar New Years. There are two activities that are special in my family on Lunar New Years such as cooking traditional cakes and décor my house.

Credit: My Dinh (Vietnam)

Sample Concluding Paragraph

In conclusion, everyone has different way to remove stress. Everyone should find the best way, and the way that make him/her more comfortable to remove stress and to be relax. Some people do not try to remove stress, and they just keep it inside them. These people are more possible to have high blood pressure, so everyone should find a way to remove stress and never keep it inside them.

Credit: Faisal Alduwaik (Palestine)

Sample Paragraph/Composition #1

I came to the United States when I was nice at that time everthing was new to me. One of the things that surpised me was football. It took me a few weeks to learn it on that time I was ten years old. I do not understand why they hit each other in football until my Uncle told me how they play. I was even more surprised when I started playing for my high school and middle school. I remember my first game it was hard for me because I started making mistakes a lot. After half-time, my offense coach told me if I make one more mistake, he will put me out of the same. After that I start doing ok in ever game. Since 2011, I started playing very good until my back and shoulder gotten an injured in my 11th grade. I always remember my football injured, and I ask myself what happened and what did I do wrong? Now I am testing myself so I can start playing football. The one thing that surprised me in the United States was football.

Credit: Robel Aberra (Ethiopia)

Sample Paragraph/Composition #2

I lived in Vietnam for 14 years with my family before I came to the United States. After five years, I still remember my first feeling when I arrived in the U.S. A lot of things surprised me like cars and American’s lifestyle. First, the roads in the United States are bigger and cleaner than Vietnam. It was really weird to me because trash is everywhere in Vietnam. It can be a bottle, plastic bag, or anything. All American are obeying the rules while they drive; in addition, there are less car accidents on the roads. On the other hand, especially in Vietnam, every minute will have at least one person die because of the car accident. As a result, driving in the United States is safer than driving in Vietnam. Next, the second thing that surprised me is American’s greeting. They are doing handshakes, hugs, and kisses to others when they meet, or they even just smile with a stranger. I felt happy, welcome, and I smile to them because I did not know what to do. Finally, all of these things above suprised me when I arrived in the U.S.

Credit: Huong Dang (Vietnam)