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2.14: Editing

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    Editing Your Draft

    If you have been incorporating each set of revisions as Mariah has, you have produced multiple drafts of your writing. So far, all your changes have been content changes. Perhaps with the help of peer feedback, you have made sure that you sufficiently supported your ideas. You have checked for problems with unity and coherence. You have examined your essay for word choice, revising to cut unnecessary words and to replace weak wording with specific and appropriate wording.

    The next step after revising the content is editing. When you edit, you examine the surface features of your text. You examine your spelling, grammar, usage, and punctuation. You also make sure you use the proper format when creating your finished assignment. Editing often takes time. Budgeting time into the writing process allows you to complete additional edits after revising.

    Editing and proofreading your writing helps you create a finished work that represents your best efforts. Here are a few more tips to remember about your readers:

    • Readers do not notice correct spelling, but they do notice misspellings.
    • Readers look past your sentences to get to your ideas—unless the sentences are awkward, poorly constructed, and frustrating to read.
    • Readers notice when every sentence has the same rhythm as every other sentence, with no variety.
    • Readers do not cheer when you use there, their, and they’re correctly; but they notice when you do not.
    • Readers will notice the care with which you handled your assignment and your attention to detail in the delivery of an error-free document.

    Chapter 9 offers a useful review of grammar, mechanics, and usage. Use it to help you eliminate major errors in your writing and refine your understanding of the conventions of language. Do not hesitate to ask for help, too, from peer tutors in your academic department or in the college’s writing lab. In the meantime, use the following checklists to help you edit your writing.

    Checklists for Editing Your Writing

    Grammar

    • Are some sentences actually sentence fragments?
    • Are some sentences run-on sentences? How can I correct them?
    • Do some sentences need conjunctions between independent clauses?
    • Does every verb agree with its subject?
    • Is every verb in the correct tense?
    • Are tense forms, especially for irregular verbs, written correctly?
    • Have I used subject, object, and possessive personal pronouns correctly?
    • Have I used who and whom correctly?
    • Is the antecedent of every pronoun clear?
    • Do all personal pronouns agree with their antecedents?
    • Have I used the correct comparative and superlative forms of adjectives and adverbs?
    • Is it clear which word a participial phrase modifies, or is it a dangling modifier?

    Sentence Structure

    • Are all my sentences simple sentences, or do I vary my sentence structure?
    • Have I chosen the best coordinating or subordinating conjunctions to join clauses?
    • Have I created long, overpacked sentences that should be shortened for clarity?
    • Do I see any mistakes in parallel structure?

    Punctuation

    • Does every sentence end with the correct end punctuation?
    • Can I justify the use of every exclamation point?
    • Have I used apostrophes correctly to write all singular and plural possessive forms?
    • Have I used quotation marks correctly?

    Mechanics and Usage

    • Can I find any spelling errors? How can I correct them?
    • Have I used capital letters where they are needed?
    • Have I written abbreviations, when allowed, correctly?
    • Can I find any errors in the use of commonly confused words, such as to/too/two?

    Be careful about relying too much on spelling checkers and grammar checkers. A spelling checker cannot recognize that you meant to write principle but wrote principal instead. A grammar checker often queries constructions that are perfectly correct. The program does not understand your meaning; it makes its check against a general set of formulas that might not apply in each instance. If you use a grammar checker, accept the suggestions that make sense, but consider why the suggestions came up.

    Proofreading requires patience; it is very easy to read past a mistake. Set your paper aside for at least a few hours, if not a day or more, so your mind will rest. Some professional proofreaders read a text backward so they can concentrate on spelling and punctuation. Another helpful technique is to slowly read a paper aloud, paying attention to every word, letter, and punctuation mark. If you need additional proofreading help, ask a reliable friend, a classmate, or a peer tutor to make a final pass on your paper to look for anything you missed.

    Exercise 1

    With the help of the checklist, edit and proofread your essay.

    Writing at Work

    Many companies hire copy editors and proofreaders to help them produce the cleanest possible final drafts of large writing projects. Copy editors are responsible for suggesting revisions and style changes; proofreaders check documents for any errors in capitalization, spelling, and punctuation that have crept in. Many times, these tasks are done on a freelance basis, with one freelancer working for a variety of clients.

    Exercise 2

    Pieces of writing in a variety of real-life and work-related situations would benefit from revising and editing. Consider the following list of real-life and work-related pieces of writing: emails, greeting card messages, junk mail, late-night television commercials, social networking pages, local newspapers, bulletin-board postings, and public notices. Find and submit at least two examples of writing that needs revision. Explain what changes you would make. Replace any recognizable names with pseudonyms.

    Formatting

    Remember to use proper format when creating your finished assignment. Sometimes an instructor, a department, or a college will require students to follow specific instructions on titles, margins, page numbers, or the location of the writer’s name. These requirements may be more detailed and rigid for research projects and term papers, which often observe the American Psychological Association (APA) or Modern Language Association (MLA) style guides, especially when citations of sources are included. To ensure the format is correct and follows any specific instructions, make a final check before you submit an assignment.

    Sample Student Paper with Outline

    The following paper and outline by Pere Ellis, entitled “Aquaponics: A Viable Solution to World Hunger,” clearly breaks down the argument presented in his thesis, providing specific examples in the sub-points and further developing and expanding the subpoints.


    Sample Student Outline

    Pere J. Ellis II

    English 1101 Honors

    Dr. Cox

    February 25, 2014

    Outline

    Thesis: Aquaponics is the best solution to the world hunger problem because it is simple to manage, environmentally friendly, and yields larger food quantities than typical farming techniques.

    1. Aquaponics is a simple system that can be managed at the individual level, commercial level, and adapted to any location.
      1. An aquaponics system can be managed by one person.
        1. The system can be created at any level to meet the individual needs.
        2. The system can be easily managed with the use of technology.
      2. An aquaponics system can be managed at a commercial level.
        1. The system can be created for small scale and large scale production.
        2. The system is capable of providing produce to the commercial market.
      3. An aquaponics system can be managed at any location.
        1. A system can be built on land not suitable for crops.
        2. A system can be created with plants and animals from similar environments
    2. Aquaponics is an environmentally friendly system.
      1. Chemical fertilizers are not used in aquaponics.
        1. Fish excrement is the only fertilizer used in the aquaponic system.
        2. Fish excrement is filtered from the water and cycled back into the system.
      2. Pesticides are not used in aquaponics.
        1. Pesticides contaminate fish tanks and potentially harm the fish.
        2. Pesticides kill insects, which are an additional food source for the fish.
    3. Aquaponics yields larger quantities of food.
      1. Aquaponics produces two types of crops.
        1. Various species of plants can be grown in an aquaponics system.
        2. Various species of fish can be grown in an aquaponics system.
      2. Aquaponics produces greater quantities of food in a smaller area.
        1. Aquaponics farms are compounded and compact ecological systems.
        2. Aquaponics farms are capable of producing food year round.

    Sample Student Paper

    Pere J. Ellis II

    English 1101 Honors

    Dr. Cox

    February 25, 2014

    Aquaponics: A Viable Solution to World Hunger

    Hunger and food shortages have plagued the world over and over again. The World agricultural community has historical problems with the demand and the need for more food. Technological advancements such as the bioengineering of plants have allowed them to thrive in harsher environments and produce high yields. But these advancements have not solved the world’s food problems. One of the more recent developments is a technique known as aquaponics. Aquaponics is a farming method that utilizes a balanced ecological cycle between plants and aquatic animals, which creates surprising results. The cycle starts with transferring fresh water aquatic animal excrement to plants as a source of nutrients. The excrement is then filtered by the plants, and the water is recycled back to the freshwater aquatic animal environment. The cycle is constantly repeated until the plants and animals are harvested. An aquaponics system is the best system for farming because it is the most easily managed and environmentally friendly system available, and it is capable of producing impressive crop yields several times higher than more traditional farming systems practiced today.

    Aquaponics is a versatile and simple system that can be easily managed by one person. One individual can easily set up a small scale operation to completely supplement or cheapen a food budget. By incorporating inexpensive sensors and other technological devices, an aquaponics system can be expanded beyond the management capabilities of one individual. Adapting technology to a smaller system will minimize the amount of time spent on managing an aquaponics system. Electronic devices, such as timed fish feeders and automated temperature control devices, reduce the amount of time spent managing a system, while simultaneously increasing production.

    Like any individually managed aquaponics systems, a commercial system can be created on any scale. The scale of a commercial aquaponics system will be limited to the available space, workforce, and funding. Commercial systems typically provide produce to individual, local, and national markets. Most commercial aquaponics systems distribute to the local market since a typical aquaponics system is a small or medium scale operation. There are a few large-scale commercial aquaponics companies capable of meeting the demands of the national market.

    No matter the scale of the operation, an aquaponics system can be created anywhere. An individual can build an aquaponics system in a backyard or on the rooftop of an apartment building. Several aquaponics farms have been created on land previously incapable of producing crops of any kind. Other commercial scale systems have been built in large unused industrial buildings reconstructed for use as green houses. In addition to being able to build an aquaponics system in any physical location, an aquaponics farm can also be adapted to many environments. The ability to adapt an aquaponics system to multiple environments comes from the variety of different plants and animals which can be grown within a single system. Identifying plants and animals that thrive in atmospheres similar to the aquaponics farm’s environment strengthens the production and survivability of the plants and animals in the system.

    While aquaponics is a very adaptive ecological system, it is also an environmentally friendly system with no chemical additives. Unlike other farming techniques, aquaponics systems never use chemical fertilizers. This is partially because chemical fertilizers are extremely toxic to the aquatic animals in the system and there is no need for chemical fertilizers. The entire aquaponics system is a symbiotic ecosystem where the fish and plants rely on each other to survive. Fish excrement provides the nutrients needed for the plants to continue to grow. In turn, the plants filter and clean the water that is reintroduced back into the fish tanks. And the cycle is repeated over and over until harvest. As with chemical fertilizers, pesticides are not used in an aquaponics system because they are harmful to both plants and animals. Additionally, insects are a natural food source for aquatic animals such as fish, which are the most common type of aquatic animal used in an aquaponics system.

    While the aquaponics system is an adaptable and environmentally friendly system, its most important quality is the amount of food that can be produced. Aquaponics farms are capable of growing two different types of crops. The adaptability of the aquaponics system is partially derived from the vast combinations of plants and animals which can be cultivated and raised. There are hundreds of various fruits and vegetables that can be grown in an aquaponics system. Broad leafy and juicy fruit bearing plants tend to do very well. Besides plants, various species of freshwater fish such as catfish, trout, and tilapia also do very well in aquaponics systems. In addition to growing fish, a few aquaponics farms have been very successful in raising different species of freshwater shrimp, further diversifying the aquaponics system.

    Another advantage of the aquaponics system is that it requires a much smaller area than traditional farming systems. Aquaponics farms are compounded systems that can produce two different types of crops in the same amount of space that one traditional crop requires. This is accomplished in part by growing the plants much closer to each other. Typically, aquaponics systems are built in greenhouses, allowing for year round production, a smaller geographic footprint, and the production of larger crop yields.

    The adaptable system of aquaponics is the best answer to solving world hunger because it produces organic and environmentally friendly high yield crops on less land than more traditional farming methods. Even though several aquaponics systems have been built in differing environments throughout world and have done quite well, aquaponics still has not been accepted as a viable alternative to traditional farming. Perhaps this is because it is a new idea and will take a while to catch on. Nevertheless, once aquaponics is accepted as a solution, the world may finally be rid of one of its longest living problems.

     

    Exercise 3

    Write a thesis statement and a formal sentence outline for an essay about the writing process. Include separate paragraphs for prewriting, drafting, and revising and editing. Your audience will be a general audience of educated adults who are unfamiliar with how writing is taught at the college level. Your purpose is to explain the stages of the writing process so that readers will understand its benefits.

    Collaboration: Please share with a classmate and compare your answers.

    Exercise 4

    Group activity: Working in a peer-review group of four, go to the section on Drafting and reread the draft of the first two body paragraphs of Mariah’s essay, “Digital Technology: The Newest and the Best at What Price?” Review those two paragraphs using the same level of inspection given to the essay’s third paragraph in the section Revising and Editing. Suggest and agree on changes to improve unity and coherence, eliminate unneeded words, and refine word choice. Your purpose is to help Mariah produce two effective paragraphs for a formal college-level essay about her topic.


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